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Tuesday, March 7, 2017

W.A.L.T: Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….
  • The title is suitable for the text.
  • The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
  • The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
  • The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

In Ako Ngatahi we had to write a narrative about a video. It was about a boy opening a present that was a dog with three legs. Here is the video of the present. I hope you enjoy my story.


The present

One day I was playing my video games. Then mum brought something it was in a box. I opened it slowly then a puppy popped up. He was cute with a big, black nose. I took it out and I looked at the puppy’s legs. He only had 3 legs I thought “Yuck” and chucked it away.

Then the puppy came up to my leg and barked. I kicked it away and I thought, pathetic puppy. Then the puppy saw something. It was a red ball. He ran to try and get it but he ran into the cupboard that’s where the red ball was. But eventually he got the ball from under the cupboard and he made the ball hit my leg I kicked it and it happened to end up in the box. So the puppy ran up to the ball and then the dog got stuck inside the box. I looked at the puppy, he grabbed the ball in his mouth. He fell over the ball fell out of his mouth. So he picked it up with his mouth and ran up to me and he dropped the ball at my feet. He was a fun and excited dog so I started to like him.

I only have one leg to, so I grabbed the ball and my crutches  and put the ball in my pocket. I opened the door and said “We’re going outside Mum” I shouted. So off we went out side. I was really happy that the pup had forgiven me.

The End